For some reason…
I’ve drilled myself into squeezing an elaborate story into a 15 paged script (short film). It’s been a whole lot of work, especially when the same story can comfortably fit into 60-120 pages (or even 20). This inevitably means little or no sub-story, but thank God I was somehow able to also achieve a kind of intertwining sub-story with flaws. But that’s not the subject matter for this post.
The image complementing this post is the 13th page of my 15 paged script, and a clear definition of what the title of the script says, PHILANDERER.
Tackling SEX SCENES in one of my previous posts, I mentioned a couple of do’s and don’t’s. Well, if you look closely, I’ve observed two “do” rules in this page. One, the sex must progress the plot. Two, you don’t have to be too explicit if one idea covers all you need the sex scene to showcase.
How does the sex progress the plot here? Clearly, Tracey is angry that after been devoured by an “angry thug” (with flaws), whom she thought loved her, she’s just another side-chick. Sad.
How does my sex description cover the explicitness intended? Simple. Imagine an angry thug. That makes it all look like a rape already. And then it happens ALL OVER THE ROOM. Come on, why won’t Tracey be angry?
Also, what’s left for the director is to plan the various locations in the room this angry thug with flaws does this act.
Enjoy the read, and please, don’t allow your imaginations run too wild!